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Thanks to both of you for your comments on my hook. Both of you raise a good point about the stories being separate. These initially were two different stories, with Paul's story being a sequel to Joanna's. I put them together to make them into a novel, but I always wondered if I was doing it the right way. After reading my hook and your comments, however, I wonder if it's even necessary to include Jo's section anymore. I had a lot of fun writing her (especially since her story was in first person and won an Honorable Mention in an international contest), but now her story is just a prelude to Paul's. Of course, if I drop her section, I can make some changes to what's left...and I should probably think of a new title...and I'll probably need to put it up on OWW again. (groan) But I think it would be a stronger story in the end, so it would be worth it. Lots to think about here....